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w.a.l.t. write an interesting first sentence to hook the our reader in.
My first sentence was It was a normal day
this is my improved sentence Pewpew the boy is playing video games it was a normal day my mum got a box.
Wednesday, July 29, 2020
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Great start Scarlett.
ReplyDeleteI can see you have given it a good effort to improve the sentence you were given.Just remember to use punctuation when you are writing.I can see you are missing some.Have a re-read and see if you can add some to your sentence to make it look neater.
Thank you for sharing your learning with us.
Hello Scarlett, I like your improved sentence you have gotten. Did you have to write a random story or did you have to watch a video for this? Next time you could tell people the title of your writing. Did you feel great about your improved sentence? -Angel
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